death-car|
|passed without his seeing it. |

Improved, these sentences become:

|The British ambassador to Norway has offered $25,000|
|reward for the capture of Benson, who bears a |
|special passport from the Kaiser. |

|Witter was standing near the curb, but failed to see|
|the death-car pass. |

=163. Coherence.=--Clearness frequently is destroyed or greatly lessened
through lack of proper coherence. Writers often forget that every
sentence has a double purpose: to convey a meaning itself and to make
clearer the meaning of preceding and succeeding sentences. The reporter
should watch closely to see not only that the phrases of his sentences
follow each other in natural sequence, but also that the relation of
those phrases to adjacent ones in the same or other sentences is clearly
shown. Here is a notice made ludicrous because the reporter used a
connective indicating a wrong relation between two clauses:

|Mrs. Alpheus White is on the sick list this week. |
|Dr. Anderson has been with her, but we hope she may |
|soon recover. |

The connective that the writer should have used, of course, was _and_,
or else none at all. Substitute the _and_ or merely omit the _but_ and
the coherence is perfect.

=164. Coherence and Unity.=--Many sentences that appear to lack unity
are really wanting in proper coherence. For instance,

|Dr. Alvers was called as soon as the accident was |
|discovered, and it is feared now she will not |
|recover, |

is a sentence lacking in unity, but one that may be unified properly if
the coherence is made good. Thus:

|Dr. Alvers was called as soon as the accident was |
|discovered, and though he gave all the aid that |
|medical science could render, it is feared now she |
|will not recover. |

=165. Sentence Emphasis.=--Sentence emphasis is gained in five ways: by
form, position, proportion, repetition, and delicacy of expression.
Sentence form--putting into an independent clause what is most
important--has already been discussed under clearness. The use of
position for emphasis is the placing at the beginning or end of the
sentence the ideas that are most important and the enclosure within of
the less important th